Headline News

Was browsing the local news and this headline struck me:

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A bit, uh, wordy, wouldn’t you say? Also, why needing to mention “With Full Life” in the headline? I know this is an unfortunate event, and my feelings to do go out to his loved ones, but I think we’re witnessing some poor copywriting here. Aren’t Chron headlines usually pretty concise?

3 Comments so far

  1. anna (unregistered) on August 16th, 2006 @ 7:14 pm

    This is a super sad story- read about it this morning. They think it stems from an altercation on the basketball court in the Bernal Heights gym where the kid was reff’ing. This reminds me of that Mission High kid that was accepted to college then killed a week or so before he left. There’s also the added element that the NoPa kid was SMS’d to stand in front of his house, where he was then gunned down.


  2. Shannon Miller (unregistered) on August 16th, 2006 @ 8:38 pm

    This is so tragic! And it make me extra squemish because I live four blocks from Grove and Baker…


  3. Observant Citizen (unregistered) on August 16th, 2006 @ 11:45 pm

    Maybe it wasn’t wordy enough, if you don’t contemplate the meaning of the content — as in a boy was killed — and not the “wordiness” of story speaking of him. So next time show a little respect.

    What I wouldn’t give to have the opportunity to shoot the bastard who did it. Stories like this make racism a viable option.



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